I recently received some feedback for my draft essay on advertising. The feedback I got was quite detailed and a little mixed. To start of I was told that the overall idea of advertising and how it has an effect was a good one. However I was told that my draft essay was quite confusing. As I had made a lot of points in my essay but seemed to have squashed them all together which made an essay that did make a lot of sense to me but from the readers perspective it wasn't as understood.
Which then made it pointless for me to explain as I wanted to create an essay that followed easily from point to point. I was told that my essay lacked structure and specific points as to what I was researching and what point the research yet to be found would make when it came to the conclusion.
The main points that I was taking away from the feedback were that I had yet to find a specific subject to write about which was probably why my draft essay did not make much sense. Also there the reader did not see any specific area in the essay concentrated on the author(s) that I was writing about.
I then moved onto explaining that I had become mixed up in various points that I had the intention of discussing in my essay however I did understand that my essay lacked structure, so It was very useful when I got points of direction into the best style and structure for my essay.
I was told that after the brief it would be best to create 4 or more paragraphs, each dedicated to the author that I will work on and the research that goes along with each author, then moving on to the next author with quotes and so on. After the main part of the essay I can then conclude the overall point and meaning of my research.
Hearing this definitely helped me put together a small plan in my head about where I would be going with my final idea. The feedback has told me that I definitely need to rethink the subject that I am writing about and hopefully find a specific point within the subject to write about.
I am then also hoping that the practical work will then become a little easier to plan and research.
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